Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful education tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do drawbacks of video games are outweigh the benefits?
It is believed that playing video games is an innocent entertainment, still a helpful education implement, while an abundance of people think that such activities are vastly damaging to players. From my perspective, I would argue that the advantages of these pastimes are outweighed by the drawbacks. In the following essay, I will present reasons to illustrate my opinions.
On the one hand, it is unable to deny that living in a technology-driven world would bring about more convenience to people, the youngster in particular, and one of them is video games that become an indispensable part of recreational activities. Firstly, joining in pastimes helps players not only unwind after the tired time of studying and working but also wide a circle of friends because it is not difficult to establish a relationship with others who have the same hobby. Secondly, people might learn practical skills through applications which simulate real-life conditions, a motor racing game, for example, may foster and enhance participants’ ability such as concentration, problem-solving and logical analyzing. Therefore, relying on these skills, people might pass challenges when they step into the world.
On the other hand, despite vivid perks of video games, there are devastating demerits that should not be bypassed. To start with, playing video games too much is the key contributing factor behind a rise in physical and mental issues, in particularly short-sighted, obesity since they usually consume processed foods and exercise less when they are addicted to these kinds of activities. In addition, a large variety of people stick their eyes on gadgets’ screen to pursue goals of games instead of reuniting with their family and mates will lead to the fact that they might feel vulnerable and alienate from other social members, thus weakening sense of community and widening distance between them and their relation. Besides, spending excessively amount of time on these games causes neglect assignments, hence they would be failed to exam.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the drawbacks of video games are more significant than the benefits.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in particular, such as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36470588235 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04433218909 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629411764706 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.871721487 49.4020404114 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.0 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.8333333333 7.06120827912 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271435026748 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897023858267 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742837169375 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174723104786 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268175068955 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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