The good and bad effects of technological advancement are inextricably intertwined. There are people who believe progress in technology is imperative to eradicate destitution. Others, however, deny this assertion and claim this is hazardous to the environment and need to be stopped. I delve into both sides of argument, while I strongly side with former.
Modernization like other human progress create havoc on environment in several ways. The major negative effect is environmental pollution which brings about irreparable damage to our natural resources including water, air and soil. Toxic gas emission, fumes resulting from industry adversely affect the climate. The discharge of industrial waste into water reservoir pollute the water supply and water shortage would be its cause. Soil erosion, destruction of animals’ natural habitat and pristine places are the other issues related to industrialization. Although industry is detrimental to ecosystem and to our health, it can be managed by effective pollution control measures.
On the other hand, poverty is the root of all evil, as it has been a major issue in many developing nations. To wipe out poverty altogether, countries need to be industrialized. Firstly, industrialization serves the needs of society by improving its economy. This paves the way to high productivity which causes ample employment opportunities to open up. Secondly, manufacturers enjoy more profitability and efficient workforce. Profitability enhance when more and more goods are manufactured and enter domestic and foreign market. Automation also help this to be achieved by reducing manual work and monitoring staff performance. For example, many poverty stricken countries like Japan now enjoy prosperous economy and wealth which they used to suffer poverty.
To sum up, in my opinion, industrial growth opens new doors for people such as improved living condition and better medical equipment, to name but a few.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 644, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun poverty seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much poverty', 'a good deal of poverty'.
Suggestion: much poverty; a good deal of poverty
...itoring staff performance. For example, many poverty stricken countries like Japan now enjoy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, while, for example, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60942760943 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19083574219 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.683501683502 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.7620252552 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.6842105263 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6315789474 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167583059713 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405285064252 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037027256912 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975346847329 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409172530573 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.96 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.28 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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