It is indubitable that money is very important for helping others. However, I
disagree with the It is indubitable that money is very important for helping
others. However, I disagree with the given statement that it is the most
essential thing in terms of a chance to help the needy. I believe that there are
numerous ways of helping the underprivileged, and monetary aid is certainly
not the best forms of aid.
My first argument to support my viewpoint is that giving money to the poor
would be a very shortsighted approach. It would satiate their needs for some
time, but ultimately they have to be made capable of standing on their own.
Providing education and job training is better way of helping them. For
example, my friend’s mother, teaches children of the slum area every evening.
She is herself not very rich, but she is helping in better ways than money can
do.
Secondly, it is not always the financial help, which is needed by people. A
timely helping hand when a person is suffering is better than helping with money. For instance, in natural calamities, such as earthquakes and floods, the
immediate need of people is food and medical care. Many college students
volunteered to carry food and medicines to the needy, when there was a flood
in some areas of Punjab, a few years ago. Fresh medical graduates also went
and stayed there and helped people with immediate medical care. In times of
crises, such help outstrips any help that money can provide.
Opponents would argue that only the rich are in a position to help the poor, as
people need money for even the basic necessities of life such as food, clothing
and shelter. Even providing education and job training to the destitute, needs
money. They have a point, but I still believe that the help in terms of personal
effort provided by those who are, themselves, not so affluent is equally good.
To sum up, if one is rich, he is in a better situation to help others who need
money and all the things which money can provide. However, I reiterate my
view by saying that to help others, one need not be rich as help can beprovided in many better ways than with money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 15, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'It'?
Suggestion: the; It
...lping others. However, I disagree with the It is indubitable that money is very impor...
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Line 22, column 32, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...oor, as people need money for even the basic necessities of life such as food, clothing and she...
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Line 25, column 26, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...s of personal effort provided by those who are, themselves, not so affluent is equally...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1814.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76115485564 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51912176556 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477690288714 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.799188301 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.38176352705 616% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292171213185 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914957305179 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550318861552 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0768528362397 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591994824145 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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