Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child’s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child’s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Child development involves various internal as well as external factors. It is argued by a significant number of individuals that guardian part is the most vital in upbringing the child. However, others consider that social factors like small screens or mates have more essential role to play in developing children. Before reaching to a conclusion, this essay will discuss both the views.
To begin with, parent are keen in developing their child because children are the ones who carry forward the legacy and make their parent feel proud on their achievements and progress. Parents prefer to educate their children in a supreme manner and work hard to support their other needs like clothes and accessories. For example, in India, the professional world is demanding more use of English language in business, therefore, to hurdle free their career path, parents prefer to educate their children in English medium schools.
On the other hand, environmental factors like friends or television have greater impact on children upbringing. Pupil learn many things from surrounding by following their favorite stars and trying to mimic their style and fashion. Majority of the youth become encouraged by looking at the grand success and fame of their celebrities and try to copy in a similar fashion to achieve success in life. For instance, a survey by Film institute of India, revealed that almost all youngsters get inspiration from the popular celebrities to do something big in life.
In conclusion, while, social factors like television or friends are highly responsible in shaping children future, I believe that children spend most of their time with parent therefore, their impact factor is on greater level as compared with other influencer.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30465949821 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70730585945 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598566308244 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3673719504 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.333333333 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0833333333 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193858264465 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785026351542 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701654814995 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129144605441 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673126550743 0.056905535591 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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