Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both view and give your own op

It is advocated by many to let children take part in group-based activities in their free time, while, on the other hand, there are those who would rather advise children to pre-occupy themselves without needing anybody else. This essay will discuss both viewpoints and finally conclude in favour of the latter approach.

Group activities are necessary for children to seamlessly inculcate the virtues that make our modern society great. It can be argued that children learn invaluable social skills and ettiquette as well as highly desirable soft skills such as leadership, team-spirit, and responsibility while participating in group activities. For instance, we can look at the football academies everywhere who train children in playing football from as early as the age of eight years. These children are all well-mannered and sober because they are accustomed to play and live as a group.

On the other hand, many people are of the opinion that children, if let to spend time by themselves, will hone their critical thinking skills. Children, by nature, are adventurous and like to experiment with whatever is present at their disposal and, thus, must be allowed to have free time by themselves which would lead to the unlocking of their mental processes and unleash their creativity. Eric Clapton, the world-famous guitar maestro, is a living example of letting a child have his own free space. He has been experimenting with his guitar skills since the age of six and has released marvellous melodies throughout his lifetime for the whole world to admire in awe.

Finally, this essay is of the notion that children will do better if they are allowed to have their free time and space. We have seen such individuals become great scientists and artists throughout history. It is these few people who were left on their own during their childhood who have gifted incredible inventions and discoveries, and art and creation to the whole mankind to reap the benefits of.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 534, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to playing'.
Suggestion: accustomed to playing
...ell-mannered and sober because they are accustomed to play and live as a group. On the other ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, so, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10153846154 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75772653128 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578461538462 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.8763892663 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.538461538 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336241936175 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107993564162 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800557368102 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20017534431 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052316998347 0.056905535591 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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