Most of the people enjoy sports because of the thrill involved with it. However some sport being dangerous, many people are of the opinion that such sports need to be banned to prevent accidents and death. However, I am of the opinion that such sport should be left to a person choice.
Many sports are thrilling. This makes the sports challenging and exciting. Mostly sports involved with racing or climbing are regarded as the most dangerous sports. In car racing, if any mishap occurs like failure of the equipment or the driver loses control of the vehicle will result in an accident. Such accident may result to death of the driver or the spectator around. Similarly people doing rock climbing, with one mistake it could prove fatal. Such sport that has thrill and challenge influences the minds of young teens. They tend to take it as a challenge and without proper training and guidance risk their life performing those stunts. To prevent such influence over young crowd many people do insist on ban of such sport.
However dangerous sports are mostly performed by trained professional. They undergo tremendous training and also ensure all safety measures are in place prior to performing such dangerous sport. For example high speed cars are equipped with seat belt and air bag to prevent the driver from an impact. Similarly people doing rock climbing have secondary retention hooks that will prevent them from falling from such height. Even in less dangerous sports like cricket, the batmen take precaution by wearing helmet and pads to protect themselves from ball. In fact sports which involves risk, makes a person strong not only in mind but also in his body. There has definitely been many instance of death even in less dangerous sports like cricket too. Recently a person died of head injury due of the ball sticking him. So it is not right to ban such sport too.
In conclusion, sports are activities that involve risk and that make him a sport person. If there is no risk, there would definitely be no enjoyment and it would no longer be called a sport but a mere activity. So according to me it’s a person’s choice to play or watch a particular sport irrespective of the thrill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...because of the thrill involved with it. However some sport being dangerous, many people...
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Suggestion: Similarly,
... of the driver or the spectator around. Similarly people doing rock climbing, with one mi...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'thrilled'.
Suggestion: thrilled
... could prove fatal. Such sport that has thrill and challenge influences the minds of y...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...g to prevent the driver from an impact. Similarly people doing rock climbing have seconda...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun instance seems to be countable; consider using: 'many instances'.
Suggestion: many instances
... in his body. There has definitely been many instance of death even in less dangerous sports ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, similarly, so, for example, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85751978892 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44290987022 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538258575198 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3497823198 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.7083333333 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7916666667 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200267179355 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602544604758 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453117927188 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129016089428 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426448750694 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.0946893788 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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