Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There have recently been passionate discussions among people about whether the artists should be supported by governments or the alternative sources. I strongly believe that the artists like painters, architects and musicians should be funded by different organizations, as well as the government.

The idea that the government is responsible for funding creative artists, is definitely acceptable. There would be a lot of huge projects throughout the city if the government make a contribution to support. Some of the contemporary artworks could not be finished by artisans, unless there was enough budget by main organizations like the government. There are impressive works of art in the city, for example, statues, squares and towers which can be considered not just as landmarks, but as a tourist attractions.

On the other hand, there are some opponents to the idea that the government should take part in these areas. These people think that the government has more important priorities. For example, Healthcare, education, accommodation and infrastructure are more in need. These groups would argue that the artworks are not necessary as long as there are lots of problems related to other contexts. There are apparently some institutes and small organizations which can invest on artists and can earn money by selling the artworks. Nowadays, it is very common that even a rich person could invest on a musician , and after a while, all the expenses will be back by arranging some concerts or programs.

In conclusion, while I agree that small alternative sources could set up a fund easily, I can not take the government's role for granted as it is just the powerful organization to support some of the prominent projects.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23297491039 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06347808205 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.086945068 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.307692308 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280578962564 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952780712441 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787241493322 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172262858667 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945982336729 0.056905535591 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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