Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
While some people opine that competition should be instilled in children, others disagree with this notion and believe that cooperation is more important, because by learning it children can become more useful adults. In my opinion, competition is more important than cooperation. This essay will discuss how growth is directly linked with the wish to compete, and although children can feel pressure because of the immense competition, it is better that they get familiar with such pressure at the early stage of their lives.
Competition motivates people to outperform others because it allows them to assess their performance against the performance of others. This essay supports this point of view because it is commonly observed that the students of the schools where academic performance is graded and ranked with the objective of promoting competition do better in studies than the students of those institutes that do not follow the same methodology.
People who support cooperation believe that the sense of competition puts unnecessary pressure on children; therefore, a relaxed environment where students can learn and cooperate with one another should be provided to them. I disagree with this thinking because it is crucial for children to cope with the pressure to compete during their childhood itself.
Moreover, it is often observed that children with difficult childhood perform better in practical life than other children. The reason is that difficulties faced at a younger age makes them well prepared for the challenges of adulthood.
In conclusion, although the sense of competition can make the childhood more stressful, it increases the probability of success in the practical life. Therefore, children should be encouraged to compete with each others at an early stage of life, as it will help them to become stronger and better human beings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31847133758 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79308622903 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515923566879 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2795774174 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.461538462 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278563134473 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103424747028 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912571200619 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138006634146 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0866609656464 0.056905535591 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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