Some say that the government should stop supporting the professional sports activities and the cultural performances, and instead begin supporting schools to encourage children to take up sports and arts. What is your opinion?
sports and arts have become an indispensable part of human society, and have been considered as professional careers for centuries. while some believe it is unnecessary for the government to invest in those areas and focus on the rudimentary level of the relevant school activities, I would argue that it is vital to support both levels to attain such sustainable development.
On the one hand, there are many reasons why professional careers in sports and arts need attention and investments. First of all, it is a crucial form of entertainment for people, which gains huge attention from the masses. For example, in the states, the Super Bowl, a football event, has been probably one of the top rating programs ever. The concomitant profits from advertisements during the half-time on television are prodigious, and spectators also contribute to the aggregated number through the amount of ticket being sold. Besides, sports activities and cultural performances define the quintessential values of the countries. For example, in Vietnam, "Cai Luong", a traditional stage performance, requires the artist to perform with special techniques and has been considered as a national form of arts. If the government is ceased to support this type of traditional arts, it will gradually disappear and will be a tremendous loss in human society.
On the other hands, encouraging children's engagement in sports and arts at an early age offers numerous perks for the community. Firstly, science has proved the paramount role of doing sports and practicing arts of all kinds in children development. Not only do they help them to grow well-rounded, but also enable them to relax after long-hour of studying. Secondly, there are several types of intelligence ranging from maths languages, sports, and arts; and with the availabilities of respective electives, talents of all kinds would be able to cultivate and proliferate. schools thus play a pivotal role in career orientation for children to explore and experiment their competences in different fields.
In conclusion, while some people believe the government has squandered their tax money in supporting professional sports and arts, I tend to support the idea that both the professional and amateur level of those mentioned areas are equally essential and required sufficient investment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42779291553 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10855119422 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58310626703 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.364776178 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.8 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4666666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226000590317 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068443723295 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630424833715 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144463981534 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488956345251 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.