Some students work while studying This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure What do you think are the causes of this What solutions can you suggest

Essay topics:

Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure.

What do you think are the causes of this?

What solutions can you suggest?

Working during education would be difficult for students to concentrate on their lessons and feeling tired about studying. In my view it there could be some factor leads students to work, such as financial needs or practical experience.

Financial aspects of life are the most important reason that forces students to work. Because without money students might not have chance to continue their education, For instance, students need money to pay the university fees or in the case of studying abroad they need it for their fundamental needs. Besides things related to earn money helps students to learn how managing their life. As a matter of facts students are learnt to manage their financial problem by earning money.

Practical experience is another factor that would be important and reasonable for working during studying. Sometimes students are working thus they want to learn more than usual or theoretical science. For example, as a computer software student, working during education absolutely improves his/her knowledge and skills in the related field.

Although, the above paragraph positively supports the view of working while studying, it makes people tired. As regarded to financial needs first solution might be governmental help for students. It means government should support students financially. Secondly university can pay fund to people who study in that university.

I am not interested in working during study, thus I truly eager to focus on what I am doing at the time. I like doing multiple stuff concurrent but as a matter of fact, doing multiple things might not have the best result for all of them equally.

As a conclusion, there some factors that forced students work during their education time such as things related to finance or gaining experience. However earning money helps them to manage their life, it makes them exhausted and decrease their motivation for study.

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Average: 8.7 (20 votes)

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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'in my view']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230538922156 0.247107183377 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.182634730539 0.155533422707 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0958083832335 0.0946595960268 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0419161676647 0.0501214627716 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0688622754491 0.0437548338989 157% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.131736526946 0.122226691241 108% => OK
Participles: 0.062874251497 0.0403226058552 156% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62522261047 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0419161676647 0.0326793684256 128% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0508982035928 0.0861772015684 59% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0239520958084 0.021408717616 112% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0149700598802 0.011925033212 126% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1925.0 1933.35771543 100% => OK
No of words: 306.0 316.048096192 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.2908496732 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.408496732026 0.374742101984 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.307189542484 0.28420135186 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225490196078 0.203846283523 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.137254901961 0.137316102897 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62522261047 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.037074148 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549019607843 0.56093040696 98% => OK
Word variations: 57.4478229212 60.7387585426 95% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0891783567 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.7743622355 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8885240595 49.517814964 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.235294118 127.492653851 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7743622355 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.882352941176 0.814263465372 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 48.7189542484 49.1944974215 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.44897959184 1.69124875643 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198377120375 0.332605444948 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0758698107572 0.102741220458 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0560090544477 0.0668466124924 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.560731750154 0.534860350844 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110024097286 0.148594505496 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764990055582 0.134430193775 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350598316099 0.0742795772207 47% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.175269461454 0.324371583561 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.060787671629 0.0638462369009 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117962189385 0.228012699653 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184925819439 0.058150111329 32% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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