These days many children spend a lot of their time playing computer games but little time doing sports. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Unlike the past, kids these days particularly tend to play computer games rather than joining sports activities. While I believe that spreading personal computers to almost every household can be the main reason, I also agree that this trend has both positive or negative developments.
To begin with, as it is almost impossible to find people who does not own a computer, children nowadays are in the position to access the Internet and computer much easier than ever. Moreover, recent explosive technological advancement has world-widely provided a high-performing computer but relatively cheap prices that everyone wants to buy. This trend has led the gaming industry to develop a various range of games, from MMORPG to FPS, to match a variety of tastes of customers, especially children. Sports activities, by contrast, often require physical demand for children before they feel a sense of enjoyment or achievement so that children often choose to play video games.
In addition, a child's development can be beneficial by playing computer games. As games provide lots of goals but limited rewards, children are willing to join the competition and maximize their imaginations to find a way of winning, and it seems to me as desirable for brain development. On the other hand, this trend can do more harm than good for children's physical development. Kids often lack enough level of immunity to various diseases and physical ability to grow healthier adults as they are isolated by sitting at a desk without exposing themselves to the outside world.
In conclusion, although playing video games has become the most popular activity among children, and it has a good impact on their developments, we should not overlook the benefits of playing sports too.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, moreover, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22183098592 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87157116371 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633802816901 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.9341221289 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.818181818 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8181818182 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269219232203 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940762831388 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480407966534 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157474395211 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277971713943 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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