In these days and age there are many different fields that require various skills. Personally, I completely agree with the idea that people who gain different skills are more successful than the people who only specialised on one skill. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, whoever focuses on only one skill can not improve themselves and learn new things. Because whenever someone works different skills, he or she learns a lot, become sophisticated than other people. For example, my brother used to focus on his only skill, which is graphic designing. He could not succeed on his field. Then he decided to work on different skills simultaneously. Finally, my brother started to be known by a lot of people and ended up with gaining money by the help of his skills. Therefore, if people want to be sophisticated, they should focus on particular skills.
Secondly, in my opinion, learning and mastering only one skill is risky. Because everyday new fields are showing up and the old ones are disappearing in the course of time, and it means that every field requires new skill. So let's think of a man who works on his projects in a company, over time people lose interest in his field. Abruptly, he lost his job, fame and etc. However, the other person who focused on different skills has more chance to get a new job and continue his life as usual. Because world, technology and people's life are unstable, human beings should be ready for every situation.
In conclusion, because working on different skills makes people advanced and makes people's life risk free, it is better to specialise on particular skills and fields.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
In these days and age there are many different fields that require various skills. Per...
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...that every field requires new skill. So lets think of a man who works on his project...
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... field. Abruptly, he lost his job, fame and etc. However, the other person who focused o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 290.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86551724138 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60108136298 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579310344828 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0423626184 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0588235294 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444482171167 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135165440808 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142984068551 0.0737576698707 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302125230029 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0996827693987 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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