Agree or disagree? It is better to get job that are similar to their parents’ than very different.
People differ greatly towards their attitudes to this problem. Some people hold the opinion that it is better for children to choose jobs that are different from their parents' jobs. Others maintain that it is preferable for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs. However, I agree with the people who believe that it is better for children to get jobs that are not similar to their parents' jobs. I think this way for a couple of reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the child will be able to develop independently. By getting a different job from their parents' the children will not be dependent on parents’ and will have the desire to work hard. On the other hand, if the children have the same job as the parent the children will know that there's someone that can help her or him with it. So, this way the children will not work as hard as possible. To illustrate my point of view I can bring an example. Basically, my brother works in a company as an accountant. He chose this major himself. He always works independently and does his best to never fail in this job. Moreover, he develops new ideas all the time and becomes even more successful day by day without his parents' help.
Secondly, the family will have members developed in different fields. In my opinion, it is more interesting to communicate with people who are developed and focused on their own goals. A vivid example that will support my opinion is my cousin's experience. Her family members are very educated people who work hard to achieve their goals. Each member has a different major and jobs. During family gatherings they chat about lots of interesting things and they enjoy spending time together. Since, each member is interested in different things and has different jobs each member gets some kind of advice from the other. This even helps them through difficult situations in life and prepares them to be ready for any kind of situation.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is more effective for children to get jobs that are different from their parents' jobs for the reasons I mentioned above. They are that the child will have the opportunity to develop independently and the family will have members who are all developed in different fields
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, i think, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73316708229 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51182735943 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4463840399 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0936041964 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0833333333 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7083333333 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45833333333 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214599551251 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659981666391 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955722909914 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145379235407 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078998219302 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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