Are governments doing well in educating people to pay attention to the importance of food nutrition and healthy eating?
In the past few decades, it is established beyond doubt that radical changes have occurred in the population’s habits and lifestyle. One of these momentous changes is far-reaching alterations in dietary habits. The majority of people think that governments inform individuals to pay more attention to their daily diets. Contrary to popular belief, I possess the conviction that people are not informed regarding the disadvantages of eating unhealthy processed foods as much as they must. In what follows, I will delve into the paramount reasons to substantiate my perspective.
First and foremost, as time goes on, the mortality rate is increasing in countries all over the world. While individuals used to live in rural areas and eat delicious local cuisine from fresh produce, most food productions are made in suburban and industrial areas nowadays. It is crystal clear that the consumption of unhealthy processed and greasy foods with food additives has brought about serious and even fatal diseases such as weight gain, heart problems, blood pressure, and so on. As a case in point, I was living with my immediate family in the countryside when I was admitted to the university entrance exam. This event made me move into a coastal city in which, Due to the lack of time, I used to eat meals in a gourmet restaurant near my apartment instead of home-cooked foods. A short after, I was hospitalized for several days owing to food poisoning. When my doctor clarified the importance of organic and nourishing foods for mental and physical health, I found no one informed me regarding this crucial issue.
The other point worth mentioning is that governments are the beneficiary of this deliberate inattention. Indeed, millions of dollars are spent on treatment by patients, which helps governments compensate for the principal portion of their budget deficit in the economic crisis. Although many individuals spend a piece of their monthly salary on health insurance to get rid of exorbitant treatment expenses, these organizations are directly dependent on government entities. In other words, the more money people spend, the more profit the governments make. It goes without saying that the expansion of non-organic food advertisements in mass media like television, radio, newspapers, magazines, and social networks is another evidence that strengthens my claim. Had governments educated individuals on their eating habits, we would not have found such obvious contradictions.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that governments pay no attention to improving society’s knowledge regarding dietary habits and food quality not only because of the significant increase in serious illnesses and death rate related to the consumption of junk foods but also for their own financial interests.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, then, while, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2363.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37045454545 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01816470422 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9141594215 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.368421053 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1578947368 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63157894737 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223598670279 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587149557214 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554298909599 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131157897747 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209111862391 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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