The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the technology might hamper the learning abilities of children which mitigate their academic performance level. To be more specific, children at a young age are not mature enough, and thereby, easily get addicted to the use of technology. In fact, children might get distracted while studying for academic subjects on computers, and they either start using social media such as Facebook and Instagram or playing video games for constant long hours. To shed more light on this, my brother’s life is a compelling example of what has been elaborated above. When he was in elementary school, my parents allowed him to use the laptop for his study purpose. Initially, he was well focused on his studies, however, gradually, he became addicted to playing videos games on the laptop for many hours and not focusing on his academic course which reduced his final grade in the exam. Fortunately, my parents made him understand his mistake and restricted his daily hours of using a laptop. Ultimately, it is judicious to say that children should not be permitted to use technology for longer hours.
Another noteworthy reason is that admittedly, technology contributes some benefits to the development of childrens’ careers, while the negative consequences are overweighed the positive ones. Actually, too much dependency on technology might affect the mental as well as physical growth of young pupils and it might get intense over a period of time. Chiefly, when children spend long hours on computers and mobile phones, their eyesight gets affected, and they get eyeglasses at an early age of their lives. Not only this but also childrens’ thinking power and ability to generate new ideas might get hampered over time since they can find everything over the internet with just one click, and slowly, it leads to depression. To exemplify, based on statistical data collected from research at the University of California shows that 75% of school-going students who used to spend more than two hours every day on computers suffered from mental depression last year. On top of that, most of them had started eyesight issues with growing age in last many years. Therefore, it is reasonable to make a point that restricting the usage of technology is beneficial for children.
To recapitulate, from contemplating all remarks. in spite of the fact that some may not agree with my viewpoint, I strongly believe that it is a wise idea to restrict the usage of technology for the young generation. This is because technological dependency can haphazardly affect their academic performance, and it can damage their overall health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... pupils and it might get intense over a period of time. Chiefly, when children spend long hour...
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Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in fact, such as, as well as, in spite of, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2242.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14220183486 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84532376914 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564220183486 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6425272163 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.555555556 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2222222222 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250555865573 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743271346303 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527978452004 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160856663975 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191572289628 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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