building a new high school in your community
In this fast growing world, industrialization and educational advancement have taken a major role. learning plays a significant role in our life so, everyone has to put the effort to raise the standard educational system. As far as I concerned, I strongly support the idea of building a new high school in my community due to two main reasons I will explain in this essay.
To begin with, population's ratio increased drastically. We need a new high school to be built for getting the advantages of that. Many employees seeking the opportunity to get their lovely career and I believe that teachers will obtain the chance to teach in new high school in my community rather than teaching abroad. Consequently, more job positions will be available for teachers, administrative or even front desk workers. For instance, the community that I used to live in, we are having just one high school besides, I met vast of teachers and professors seeking jobs abroad or to the cities closest to mine. Taking my mom as an example, she is a teacher for more than twenty years; she couldn’t be able to teach in my community school because we don’t have any position being posted for months. She decided to find a job farther than her home. She becomes satisfied if we will have a new high school nearby. That will affect the economic and educational levels also of our community.
Additionally, the closest high school is the one that many parents prefer. Hence, the population will be distributed equally and communities will be much harmonized. According to the school’s district, parents can decide where they can buy a home or land or even invest their money to. Parents used to spend their times drop off their children to high school and pick them up and this takes forever to be done. Moreover, build new high school will enhance individuals to invest their time and energy into their job and duties. Personally, I’m the one who’s taking care of my kids while having the only one high school in our community; it’s getting difficult by times because they have a waiting list and none of my kids enable to be accepted the same high school in my community. I registered them to another one which is took me an hour to reach it. The new announcement will help me as a mother to let my kids study next to my house and I will save my time as well.
To put in a brief, I strongly agree about the new announcement of build a new high school in my community due to that will enhance employees for finding jobs to improve their educational liabilities and will help parents to save their time and effort of taking their children to a far high school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 100, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Learning
...al advancement have taken a major role. learning plays a significant role in our life so...
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Line 4, column 844, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...registered them to another one which is took me an hour to reach it. The new announc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, hence, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68936170213 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73701386683 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482978723404 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0446492277 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.952380952 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.380952381 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33053167779 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112341906235 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11154609161 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246069634913 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477533857111 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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