A university wants to improve the quality of life for students who reside in a dormitory on campus. Which ONE of the following things do you think the university should spend money on for this purpose, and why？
-Providing a room for quiet study
-Building an exercise room so that students can improve their physical well-being
-Providing space for entertainment (for example, a place where students could watch films together)
The great majority of people agree that universities are excellent places for students to gain knowledge and meet friends. Personally, I believe that it’s better for the university to spend money on providing a room for quiet study. There are several reasons why I feel this way, which I will elaborate on in the following essay.
First of all, the main purpose of college students is to gain knowledge that helps them excel in their career, and the university should provide them a comfortable environment for them to achieve their goals. Take computer science major students for example. In order to become a great engineer, they are required to study diversified subjects, such as data structure, algorithms, and so on. Those subjects are very difficult and need a high concentration to profoundly absorb the knowledge. Accordingly, it is a good idea if the university can provide them a quiet room for studying. They can be more efficient and concentrate on gaining specialized knowledge.
Furthermore, dormitories are usually very noisy and not suitable for students to study. Therefore, they might need a better place to work on their school work. In dormitories, students will make noises while playing video games and chatting with friends, which might distract those who want to study. Because of this issue, I think it will be great if the school gives them a cozy place to do their assignments and study for their tests.
In conclusion, I maintain the idea that the dormitory students demand a quiet place for them to study. This is because they come to the university to gain useful knowledge and they need a suitable room to concentrate on their school work.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 280.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01071428571 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77276983376 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517857142857 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5728496748 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5333333333 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334230637284 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119562882754 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978533509012 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226619530323 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824788199228 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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