do you agree or disagree? famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy that they have now .
The question is whether famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy that they have now or not. Everyone with regard to his private vantage point can maintain a specific direction toward this statement; however I am inclined to refute it. In my perspective, the fame requires much attention and it is the nature of these types of jobs. My arguments and reasons are listed below which will strengthen my point of view:
To begin with, it is axiomatic that every man has a great passion toward being famous. In fact the dream of fame is not separate from human's soul. One should notice that every actor or athlete has selected this way for gaining attention in spite of having his talent. It is a psychology issue into people who are willing to set on the first paper of magazines or are seen in media and so on; consequently spontaneously it has been a personal choice. These people have prefer to have a public life instead of privacy life.
The second reason why I do not accept this suggestion lies in the fact that athletes or actors and other famous men are a prosperous cortex; subsequently the condition of their life and their personal experiences can help ordinary people to alter the circumstance of their life. It goes without saying that successful artists, scientists and entertainers play in a crucial role in society. Nobody could overlook this reality that they motivate people to try for accessing to an ideal goal.
Moreover, having more privacy life for these types of guilds can harm to Media. People are always curious about life of famous persons whether in sophisticated community or the third world. When these private issues are cut off from media, people will not be eager for reading or watching them; as a result negative effects will be dominated in media ground.
As I have illustrated, I strongly disagree with this opinion and believe that having a deep understanding from famous people's life can assist typical people in making appropriate decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'preferred'.
Suggestion: preferred
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, then, third, in fact, as a result, in spite of, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90615835777 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61658853233 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574780058651 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1863107019 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.533333333 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273997524078 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099828390319 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158407766983 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151768445339 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620369226581 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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