Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Presenting diversity facilities and appealing hobbies are positive points of modern era that encourage the people to experience different things. While some people refer to positive side of experiencing different thing due to be familiar with plenty issues, others mention to negative effect on human life. I support the concept that refers to cut the human performance by doing many different things base on three points, raise the mind problems, reduce the physical health rate and waste the time for less important things.
First of all, it isn’t identified a distinct amount for mind but it doesn’t mean doing well beside involving a lot of things. While some scientists reveal that human mind owns interminable ability to doing variety things with high performance, the outcomes in the reality state in contrast with the scientists theory because when mind divided in many parts it’s power will be disperse among variety things. So, expectation to be professional and doing well seems far fetch. Our office is a logical example to clarify the issue. Two years ago, in a research, group of the employee who involved with plenty of things, showed the fragile performance in contrast with the second group who was facing with limited things. As a result, it can be concluded that diversity things leads the mind to more thoughts and reducing the well-doing.
Secondly, physical health which plays a significant role to achieve the favorable result of tasks, can be reduce the performance when faces with plenty of things to do. Some arguments express the interminable physical capacity that more tasks enhance the physical strong. However, this idea can be repudiates easily base on the researches. For instance, my brother who done variety things like sport, education, dance, working, had many struggles at the office due to not having proper physical. In fact, using the body more than its capacity, reduced his performance at the work.
Thirdly, time schedule should be plans due to tasks importance to well done. While groups mentions that people attain different knowledge and skills by spending time for many tasks, other argues them due to time limitation. For example, my friend, as a young person like to spend her time for diversity hobbies and tasks but she never could finish one of them and of course her performance was lack of sufficient result. Therefore, divided time in less things can show adequate outcome.
Consequently, I am in favor of the statement which mention to low performance due to do more thing base on three points, dividing the mind between more things, diminish the physical health and spend time for less important things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e the time for less important things. First of all, it isn't identified a...
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...reduced his performance at the work. Thirdly, time schedule should be plans d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, of course, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14416475973 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6231882949 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528604118993 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.0129916693 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.315789474 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78947368421 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2234552218 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695898569133 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525906864209 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129625048519 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631554910747 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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