Do you agree or disagree with following statement? Education of children is more difficult task today than in past because they spend so much time on cellphone, online games and social network web site.
In this age, discipline is one of the most important part of our life; hence, learning to the offspring is controversial issue. Also, with develop of technology children know about very thing and its make problem for teacher to learning them compare past. However, I believe that modern technology make it easier for teacher and patents since the internet, cellphone and online game provide so much material for kids’ education; Now I will make clear my opinion.
First of all, comparing between past and now, it’s completely obvious that learning to the children is easier than past. Todays, teachers are not major core of education and education of children don’t only depend on the teachers and classes. Hence, children spending so much time with electrical devise that they can learn many knowledge from them. Some times this knowledge are more important than knowledge from school and they cannot be offered by teachers in classes and even children's parents. Furthermore, children can better learn their lessons with playing online game and using online courses. For example, my little brother is nine years old. He is studying in elementary school. As sake of playing online game, he learn all lessons with plying game and searching on the word wide net. He always connect with friend and her teacher with internet; thus, he and classmates can solve problem.
Moreover, discipline to the kids need high quality knowledge than before; accordingly, high technology is not blame for hard task of teachers. Teachers and parents must be learn and know how to work with technology. If parents and teachers don’t connect with technology, they won’t connect well with children. Besides, todays, most of school are electronic school ¬¬_ work with computers and internet_. This schools are rely on computerize assignment than in the traditional text book to teach kids. This style not only have more efficiency, but also have more attractive for children, so kids learn better their lessons. I believe that online learning is similar to play game and it’s not boring. For instance, I am not elementary student, but I am still learning English, so I prefer to use games, online courses and e-books in order to acquire new knowledge. I rely on games to make my study more interesting (especially for learning new vocabulary).
In conclusion, even though some people believe that education in past is easier than now, but I believe that discipline children have more better and modern technology help to develop of learning kids. First, learning with game and electrical devise is more attractive for children, and also, they acquire more knowledge on online network that ever before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much knowledge', 'a good deal of knowledge'.
Suggestion: much knowledge; a good deal of knowledge
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
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Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'connects'.
Suggestion: connects
...arching on the word wide net. He always connect with friend and her teacher with intern...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'relied'.
Suggestion: relied
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
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Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2280.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19362186788 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61653977119 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487471526196 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9503826286 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1304347826 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95652173913 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235935965667 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759063804109 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544857437191 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166670291641 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589124014838 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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