“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (such as grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ideas.”
It is controversial whether the extended family is less important now than it was in the past or not. Some people might agree with the statement because people nowadays became too private about their personal lives. I, however, definitely disagree with the statement for two reasons.
To begin with, extended families can relieve our stress and worries. Family’s existence itself is a force to everyone. From my experience, back in my high school, one classmate had lost her expensive necklace and presume me as a robber. However, I have not seen the necklace even once in my life. Sadly, including teachers, almost everyone regarded me as I have taken her necklace. I was so sad and mad that I was considered a suspect. I told every story to my aunt and uncle that I was called into doubt about the necklace incident. They got really angry about the problem. Specifically, my uncle was a detective of note. The next day, my uncle had complained about the school and had helped teachers find the suspect. Consequently, the suspect was the owner of the necklace. She had taken an unrighteous attitude because she was jealous of me. Therefore, my problem was just solved thanks to my extended family members.
On top of that, extended families will help you develop functional and helpful skills. Each of the extended family members has valuable experiences in their lives. For example, back in my fancy years, I acted as if I was living in my grandparent’s house which means I always visited my grandparent’s house. My grandparents were intellects of note and had a courteous nature. Therefore, I could not only learn valuable knowledge and virtues they had in their lives but also build an upright character. Moreover, I also have learned skills they had to solve their problems. When I grew up and became an adult, I could overcome hardships easily compared to my friends. My example shows that learning life lessons from an extended family are quite fruitful.
To summarize, there is no reason to agree with the statement. First off, people are not only able to recover from the difficulties. Second off, people will be also able to develop helpful life skills thanks to extended families.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, for example, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75335120643 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56141211709 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512064343164 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 373.0 20.1344086022 1853% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1773.0 100.406767564 1766% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 373.0 20.6045352989 1810% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 128.0 5.45110844103 2348% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223613016453 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223613016453 0.076458572812 292% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15770376102 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837387010567 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 187.4 11.7677419355 1592% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -307.12 58.1214874552 -528% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 148.8 10.1575268817 1465% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.75 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.02 8.01818996416 312% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 10.002688172 530% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 151.2 10.0537634409 1504% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 53.0 10.247311828 517% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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