Education is the gateway for the development and prosperity of any society. I disagree with the statement that improving the quality of education requires spending money on salaries of the university professors. I will explain the reasons on which my stance is based in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the facilities and libraries at any university is the keystone for any improving in the quality of education. I do believe that spending money on improving the facilities, such as libraries, laboratories, and computers equipment, is more essential than any other issue. Basically, the more we improve this facilities, the better quality of education we will gain. For example, many poor countries have great qualified professors who studied in developed countries, but their countries are not able to fully benefit from their knowledge because the universities in these countries lack the necessary resources, labs and libraries which are extremely vital at any educational process. A vivid example of this, in my country, when a prestigious Nobel prize winner, PhD. Ahmed Zwel came back to his country to help impart his knowledge to the new generation, he did not manage to achieve this goal. The main obstacle was the lack of the main labs and resources inside the university which made his effort to improve the quality of his students is just like building a castle on the wind. Generally speaking, the facilities and labs should take the larger part of funding inside any educational institution
Furthermore, the internet has given us the ability to establish virtual educational universities which could provide education to larger numbers of people in more effective ways than the traditional ones. The government should allocate more money for setting up these virtual platforms instead of spending it on more ineffective traditional universities. The new approach of conveying science in more creative and unique way using the internet should be the priority of any state. For example, I have read a research about a comparison between the traditional and online educational institutions in India. The research indicated the those students who studied in the traditional way. The future is for those who follows creative and unique approaches in enhancing the quality of education.
In conclusion, I think that the money should be spend on improving the quality of the current traditional universities and creating new virtual online universities which are more effective.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35189873418 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97870022379 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501265822785 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.0378391764 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.352941176 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2352941176 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321124456523 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109422411011 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110075259112 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232100436962 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661469131629 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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