Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We live in the information era. Human beings have a dramatic issue if they want to keep distance from hearing too much news and events around the world. In my opinion it is not necessary to know about everything happening, especially those who are not going to affect our life.
First, many people easily lose their concentration and cannot finish their immediate tasks when they are exposed to unrelated information. People's insatiable desire to discover new things coupled with the interesting nature of news is to blame for losing control over keeping concentration. For example, regardless of its effectiveness upon our life, famous people have a high importance in the news. They start or finish a relationship, dress exotic things, or make dramas about their personal life. These are a big part of the media, which has nothing to do with our life but for many individuals these are attracting subjects for gossiping, which easily distract their mind from their important duties. On the other hand, most activities one has to do are really hard-to-follow constantly and demanding. If people are more focused on their work rather than paying attention to minor irrelevant news they can accomplish their tasks better and consequently gain more success in their life.
Second, although many events around the world are not directly effective in people's life, they trigger anxiety and depression and other mental diseases. News provokes bad feelings and emotions in people because they continuously show negative occasions around the world which leave a long-lasting adverse effect on one's mental health. For example, murder, bad languages, rape and war to name but a few. This is because human beings are highly impressionable and susceptible, especially when they are young and immature. If people were aware of their sensitive nature and vulnerability of their mental health, they never expose themselves to this information unless they find a relevance to their own life.
Third, nowadays people are pressed for time and it is not rational to waste it following unnecessary events. People have dreams and personal goals which have deadlines looming on the horizon. They have to allocate time accurately with prioritising the most important and relevant ones to prevent themselves losing track of time. In this regard people should eliminate those time-consuming things like gossiping about events and relevant news which does not contribute to their personal goal. If people use their time efficiently rather than wasting it by following some irrelevant events they can climb the ladder of success and gain more achievements through their life.
In concluson, it is better to follow just the events are related to our life. Becouse irrelevent news are harm one's concentration, damage mental health and consume their time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, really, second, so, third, as to, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2391.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28982300885 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75381519359 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528761061947 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3784041939 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.681818182 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5454545455 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153649686263 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522884962587 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380391016431 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099335492128 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240773857509 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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