Except for doing homework, parents should limit the use of children under the age of 13 on electronic devices such as computers and mobile phones. Do you agree or disagree?
Indisputably, preteenagers tend to be very interested in using technology; it is a world full of
curiosity for them. I concur that children should be controlled and restricted by their parents for
the use of electronic devices until they reach the age of 13. I substantiate my belief by providing
some supportive reasons that are elucidated below.
To begin with, by limiting the use of technology, children are more likely to be protected from the
dangers of technology. Most electronic devices have access to the internet nowadays;
therefore, if children use these devices uncontrollably, they might face the various dangers of
the internet. My sister's experience is a compelling example of what I mean. When my sister
was 9 years old, she was extremely eager to have her own mobile phone. My parents finally
agreed to get her one. Clearly, this ended up badly. Someone started talking to her on the web
and told her she was the same age as her. Things were getting out of hand when, fortunately,
my parents noticed this and prevented her from talking to that stranger any further. This
example demonstrates that since children are not sufficiently aware of the threats around them,
computers and mobile phones should only be used for school. Electronic devices can be
significantly hazardous to young children!
Furthermore, electronic devices are tremendously addicting and can be bad for the mental
health of children. In other words, children will end up spending the majority of their time using
computers or mobiles. Additionally, they will forget about the world around them. My own
experience demonstrates this concept. When I was about 12 years old, I had just gotten my first
laptop. All I did at that age, was play games and watch movies. I was so addicted that I forgot
about everything else and nothing else mattered to me. My grades dropped in school, I was
developing an unhealthy relationship with my parents, and I lost most of my friends. Hence,
electronic devices are unhealthy and can cause serious mental problems when not controlled by
All things considered, I strongly believe that unless children are using technology to get help
with their schoolwork, parents should limit their use of electronic devices. This is because
children will be protected from this unsafe world, and because they won't become obsessive.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 72, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding threats'?
Suggestion: the surrounding threats
... children are not sufficiently aware of the threats around them, computers and mobile phones should on...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, therefore, i mean, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18298969072 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86647417482 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546391752577 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6417361503 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4347826087 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8695652174 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 26.0 4.53405017921 573% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234478987124 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648529794941 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759755798486 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0680228591575 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655492173978 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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