Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to use the land for human needs such as farming, housing, and industry than to save endangered animals.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The technology is being developed apace and human population are increasing rapidly. As a result, more land is needed to support these matters, which may disrupt some species of fauna. I believe that using lands to protect threatened animals is beneficial for mankind. I have two rationales for holding this opinion, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, some kinds of animals attract tourists, so they will influence economies of particular countries well. In fact, several types of fauna fascinates humankind. Moreover, endangered animals can be more interesting since they are rare and existing in only few regions. Therefore, individuals who are willing to see these creatures will trip to nations in which these animals are prevailing. Needless to say, they will pay for these countries. As a result, some communities will take advantage of funding that comes from traveling. For instance, small bears of desert exclusively exist in my nation, Mongolia, but not in other regions. Fortunately, Mongolian authorities utilized the huge extent of area to insulate these bears. Thus, many foreign tourists are traveling to my country to see this creature. Hence, Mongolian government took advantage of fees from travelers and improved its economy. This example demonstrates how some animals can play a significant role in the economy.
Secondly, animals will affect the environment positively, so nature is supported, which is also key factor to humankind's well-being. Some animals are essential for ecosystem because living organisms in every ecosystem rely on each other to survive. However, if mankind excludes some species, they will pose threat to the whole environment. Eventually, people might occasion danger to their survival because they live without the presence of water and oxygen. For instance, some animals help vegetation to spread seeds, in turn, to reproduce. If these animals are missing, particular plants will die out because they cannot reproduce. Consequently, the extent of carbon dioxide in atmosphere will increase due to the absence of plants such as trees, which means humans' health will be affected negatively. To sum up, species of fauna ensures survival of mankind indirectly because they are important in their ecosystem.
In conclusion, employing lands to save animals in danger is critically important, compared to using these lands for people's needs. This is because certain species of fauna can help economies of certain nations, and they are essential in ecosystem.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44191919192 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81944303085 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570707070707 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.6496734258 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.2 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.84 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.56 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140819594581 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415245491923 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506909876481 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106518893831 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428603520535 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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