Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Nowadays people are more willing to help people they don't know (for example, by giving clothing and food to people who need them) than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples
No one can cast doubt on the fact that people inherently tend to be useful and profitable for others, and this brings about a sense of satisfaction for them. The controversial question which arises here is whether, nowadays, people's inclination toward helping poor people whom are unknown for them, is more than in the past or not. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that due to the situation of the world where we live, todays people are more simulated to people others. To support this, there are several reasons two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, nowadays, thanks to the advancement of technology, people have access a lot of evets occuring all around the world. This situation provide people with the opportunity to be aware about tough situation of some people and their difficulty in handling their basic requirements of their lives. As a result, although a person may not know the poor people who needs their helping hands, this awareness enncourages him or her to help people as much as possible. For example, a couple of years ago, when a casual earthquake haapened in a city of my country, Kermanshah, I saw the picture of local people on social media, and it provoked my human resposibilty to help them, so I sent some of my clothes an blankets for them to be able to survive the cold winter.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, this days, due to the current economic climate and the difficult situation of the modern world, the number off people who suffered from poverty is on the rise, and there are a large number of people over the world who need our helping hands in order to survive. It is a game on consequences, the more the number of poor people, the more the willingness of people regarding reduce the poverty in the world. Poeple offer their helping hand to poor people not only to whom are known, but also to whom they may not know at all, for example in another countries. As an illustration, take the example of last year situation, when people in my country collected some matters such as clothes, blankets, foods, to name bu few, in odren to send for people in Yemen who were in situation in which did not access to these basic rights of life.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that, nowadays, people are more willing to help people they do not know. The fact that they are more aware about people's situation through Internet and social media, coupled with the enreasing number of people who suffer poverty, is the reason which strengthens my claims.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...help them, so I sent some of my clothes an blankets for them to be able to survive...
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...help them, so I sent some of my clothes an blankets for them to be able to survive the cold...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
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...m poverty is on the rise, and there are a large number of people over the world who need our help...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, then, for example, in short, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66596194503 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54479422226 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498942917548 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3135295544 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.642857143 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7857142857 20.6045352989 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401229583586 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156850787661 0.076458572812 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070751378535 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275371964868 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047797990858 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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