Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Budget allocation priorities have been always a key factor for a successful government. Nowadays, disbursing a large amount of money on some essential projects is their concern to keep the society in its best way. The controversial question which arises here is whether, the government should invest more money on support of arts that on support of athletics. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that allocating more money to support arts is more important in a society. To support this, there are several reasons two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, artistic have the big contribution to each society. Their work convey the evets and situation in one country and can be preserved for next generation, in this regard, the future generation will have access to a lot of information about their society from the artistics productss. Not only is it beneficial for next member of one society, but also it is a useful feature for foriegn people to get familiar with a different country's costum and tradition. For example, a couple of years ago, I was working on one of my assignment of history class, in that I need to gain some basic information about some European contries and their way of clothing during 1000B.C. I used some of their some of their paintings which have preserved from that time and it provided me with a basic information about them in short time.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into accout is that artistics' work are very demanding and they have to spend a large part of their income to buy their instrument and tools inorder to create attractive and useful products. Only with bursing a lot of money for them and being supported by the government, they can stay incentive and keep on working. As an illlustration, take the example of one of my friend, who was very talented in sculpturing and has made the sculpture of a lot of faamous people which are stand in different squares of the capital in our contry. Two years ago, her father suffered from death-leading disease which his treatment cost expensive, my friend spend all of her income to cure her father so she did not have enough money to buy tools for her work, as a result, she left that work and started to work in as a secratory in a compay. Had she supported by the government more, she would have the chance to create more sculptures which make the view of the city more attractive.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the government should spend more money in support of arts. The fact that their works is beneficial for each society to be well-expressed for people in and out of each country, coupled with their demanding work, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, well, for example, in short, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71026156942 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69761365973 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476861167002 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.8431534188 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.3125 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0625 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18700087072 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856015135781 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916850587849 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14449620694 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0799072064238 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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