Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are some chaotic in today's world which make life harder than past. Living with uncertainty and making decisions without ensuring make people get stressed and tense. Thus it is necessary for the government to take plans that make people calmer and cooler. People should use some activities that help them to relax and reduce the pressure. Some aesthetic activities are useful. a controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether Governments should spend more money in support of arts or whether should support athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Some people possess the conviction that the former is more agreeable whereas others hold exactly the opposite and allege that the latter is more fruitful. I personally content that this issue is multifaceted. I think some majors and fields that need team management and control hard to access certain budgets for them. They always have extra costs in different regions. To substantiate my point of view, the following paraphrases represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind elucidating my standpoint is some aesthetic activities like painting have a great impact on our brain and mental health. When people see and visit the galleries of art they feel less attention and it helps them to be more relaxed. When the government supports the exhibition's budgets and provides them with some facilities the artists encourage and gradually the rate of violence decreases. Consider my personal experience to make this point clear. Three years ago, the Tv showed a movie which was about Wrestling. After several podcasts, the researcher found half of the teenagers were absorbed by this film and had a bad influence on their behaviors.
The second rationale behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that government can make a situation in which people can sell their art and get money in this way. It helps them and has a good impact on society's economy. The more art will be sold the more artists will be crate and consequently, the GDP increases.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, I agree with this statement that Governments should spend more money on the support of the arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, i think, in brief, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12295081967 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7128781147 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579234972678 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.390270367 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2857142857 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4285714286 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250895113001 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598589079291 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104421567398 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171902131467 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998734699404 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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