Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Most of the people agree that artistic masterpieces and sport achievements, both play a vital role in a national identity of a country. Although I believe that both of these fields worth an immense attention from government, art and artists might need a greater support from authorities. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
The first reason that is significant is that while some people are of the opinion that athletes should receive greater attention, they already have enough allowance. It goes without saying that everyone is aware of sports incomes and investing on them would be a profitable investment with least percentage of risk. As a result, there are a lot of private investors who readily support sports team and individual athletes financially. On the other hand, artists and their crafts value have always been underestimated. I strongly believe that artists at my country don’t get the attention that they deserve, though they have produced great and worldwide known masterpieces. Unfortunately, in my country, people who choose art as their future major should get themselves prepared for being neglected and this ignorance is not only from the government but also from other people and investors. They just don’t believe that art is worth the investing and it’s a waste of money. In situations like this, I believe that it’s government duty to back up artists and bring people’s faith back to the art of their country.
Another major reason is that although a win in a sport match can help a country in different ways and make the country a global champion, an art masterpiece can make others familiar with the country and its culture. To be more specific, an art craft like a painting or a sculpture or even a movie can tell a lot about the country they were made in and their impacts can remain as a history sign of that country. Greece is a compelling instance of that. There are evidences that the Olympic competitions have originated in ancient Greece, however people barely talk about or know about the winners , but Greece ancient palaces and statues and art crafts on whole, tell us so many thing about the people who used to live there at that time and about the customs and traditions they had. As a result, I am of the opinion that the influence of art on a country is more profound and long lasting than a sport achievement, therefore it is worth more attention.
In conclusion, the both fields have their own importance and none of them deserve neglect specially from the government, however art would tell much about a country and it would be right to be prioritized.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: with the least
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Suggestion: ,
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...ues and art crafts on whole, tell us so many thing about the people who used to live there...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to neglect'
Suggestion: to neglect
...own importance and none of them deserve neglect specially from the government, however ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83956043956 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69981346893 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496703296703 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0684870623 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.529411765 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133035149582 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429960055808 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361077299368 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.071716314006 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345243642585 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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