Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
“People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, and not enough time
on more serious duties and obligations.” Use details and examples to support
your answer
As world continues to develop, people get more overwhelmed by the tasks they must do at their work, Personally, I believe today people dedicate less time to enjoy themselves than any other time. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
The most significant reason is that will in a competitive world and it gets more intense every day. In a world like this, people have to halt any other thing and concentrate their whole effort and time on their job to prove themselves and get promoted. Unfortunately, if we want to catch up with the rapid pace of other’s progress, there will be no other choice rather than a hectic life style. In the past there were only a few expert people who could accomplish a specific task, but nowadays there are myriad of people with the same proficient who can do the same task. Thereby, people have to keep learning and coming across with creative idea to stand out others. The whole learning and competition process bring benefits to the businesses but almost ruin personal lives.
Moreover, in the past people had different priorities and their goal were too different. In the past people used to work to be capable of raising a family and meeting their needs. On the other hand, today people set their goals in their careers and they merely focus on that. Starting a family and spending time with them comes after achieving what people set out to. My brother is a compelling example of this. He started his occupation as a fresh engineer. It took him several years to learn all the aspects of his job, and after that he put all his effort to show his abilities to his manager. Finally he got promoted and now his the CEO of their company, but all this process prolonged for about 10 years. After all these years he is still inundated by his job duties in a way that he barely thinks of marriage.
In conclusion, life has never gotten easier and the cost of these recent years progress, is the change of targets and less time to spare for people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...t to show his abilities to his manager. Finally he got promoted and now his the CEO of ...
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Line 3, column 711, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s process prolonged for about 10 years. After all these years he is still inundated b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, moreover, so, still, after all, i feel, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55890410959 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37956522156 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564383561644 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1802183018 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4444444444 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2777777778 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175137703343 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520588266612 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494770913616 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108601665597 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506372195974 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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