Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, since the dawn of civilization, humans have honored art and athletics in specific ways, during the time these two skills have been improved by individuals and governments around the world. Hence, while some people are of the opinion that spending more money to support athletics like Olympic teams is significant, I believe that they should have more focus on art and allocate a budget to support this field. In the following paragraphs, I will mention two of my reasons to support my idea.
At first, I think these days numerous people like sports and support various teams in different fields because sport is more attractive and exciting for them, thus, art has an effective role in human's mental health, then this is critical to spend more money in this skill which in modern era societies underestimate that. To be more specific, when people enter art galleries their eyes and brain will be more active to analyze the detail of each art, additionally, they like naturally to realize each side of artist beliefs which is joyful for the visitor and cause activate of the individuals brain hemisphere. this is proved that it helps them to enhanced their concentration which is so important. As an illustration, my cousin is graphist, she draws the geometrical patterns with different specific meanings, most of visitors encourage her, they think, these kinds of arts refresh their mind during limited time. But because our government does not allocate budget to art more enough these kinds of young painters cannot have annual galleries.
The other reason that is worthy to note is that, these days with the development of technology most of young people use Playstation or computer games then they are completely familiar with sports, so they follow sports teams, especially Olympic teams, but none of them care about art and culture which is terrible for governments and countries history. In detail, when governments spend more money on the spport which is naturally trend, as a result they reduced their citizen's cultural knowledge and visual eyes. so during the years, this part of society will degrade. As a result, it desrtoys people of future generation perspective. For instance, in the country that I live the government some how hate of art and most of younger people not aware of the arts genre which is terrible.
To wrap it up, as I mentioned in previous paragraphs, when government allocate more budget on athletics rather that arts, Not only can people improve their concentration and mental activities, but also cause a decrease of future's knowledge of the country art and culture.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, then, thus, while, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06697459584 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66991177154 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519630484988 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.8484720935 48.9658058833 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.714285714 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9285714286 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236025491225 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821854587956 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762698281879 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155913986593 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872249631344 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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