Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern era, we are living in a situation in which the world is changing and becoming sophisticated, as a result of this progression the importance of education as a bulding blocks of a society is on a rise. The controversial question which arises here is whether, after high school, students shoud spend a year of their lives working or traveling before attending at universities. When it come to me, it is my firm conviction that, it is the better course of action for students start studying at university right after compeleting high school. To support this, there are several reasons two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, students inherently tend to forget subjects they learn at schools. Being far from the places they learn topics catalyze the losing processes. Keeping in touch with lessons after the high school, which is provided for students in universities gives them the opportunity to fix context in their mind and learn all ins and outs of lessons, so they can exploit them in their future professional lives without any dificulty. For example, a couple of years ago, I was suffering a disease which forced me to stay away from school for one year. After I cured and returned to school, the situation was more dificult for than others to remeber some subjects and made me spent a significant part of my time reviewing last-year's lessons. Had I study continuously, without any cessession, I would not have had difficulty.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that the universities bridge the gap between high schools and workplaces. Attending at university after high school provide the students with the golden chance to improve their information and gain more practical skills an become expert in a special field. In the consequence, due to their skills and experiences they will meet a wide range of job opportunities, an eventualy, they can land the one which is the best fit for them. On the other hand, working after high school, although may have some financial benefits for them, they are supposed to do loose jobs such as sorting books, typing, to name but few, and all of which do not give them any valueable experience that could be helpful for their future life.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that starting studying at university after high school is the prudeent course of action for students and have a lot of advantages for them. The fact that they can remeber lessons better and deepen, coupled with making them more expert in a certain field, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
...fore attending at universities. When it come to me, it is my firm conviction that, i...
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Line 2, column 810, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'studied'.
Suggestion: studied
...ime reviewing last-years lessons. Had I study continuously, without any cessession, I...
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Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ormation and gain more practical skills an become expert in a special field. In th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, for example, in short, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86984815618 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72871410052 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529284164859 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8732451138 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.3125 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8125 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2591212336 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093880958993 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640954728537 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180727831313 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026100492396 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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