Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
What is beyond dispute is that the endless debate regarding the gap year before studying on campus, in modern society, not only causes broad public concern but also provokes a hot topic among private individuals. Some cling to the perspective that the off time will benefit those pre-undergraduates. In theory, perhaps as sound and attractive as their claim seems, but in practice, what they state can by no means bear closer analysis. Consequently, without hesitation, I hold the view that continuity in schooling is as indispensable as a lighthouse, which directs the navigators in the vast sea.
What appears as the first factor is that we can't afford to adjust ourselves to the role of workers right. To be more specific, the cultivation of the ability to do an outstanding performance needs two years or even three years. This point can be better and further supported by the example from one of my intimate classmates, Lihao. He used to insist on having a gap year before being a freshman. Thus, he chose to find an accounting job in Shanghai, China. After a year, when he was going to study at a college, Lihao suddenly found out that he was not adept at accounting and simultaneously lacked the mindset of being a student. Obviously, it may inform us that the significance of continuity between high school and university.
Most importantly, all students in high schools really need the transition before they home in on the cruel society. Precisely, students on campus will have the opportunities to learn something about the skills that they might entail-e.g., Making friends, workplace diversity, and so on. I cannot think of a better illustration for this viewpoint than the instance from myself. When I was an undergraduate, I took plenty of curricula that really benefited the rest of my life, such as microeconomics, management, etc. If I did not learn these sorts of knowledge when I made the discretion to my career as a counselor, I would produce more troubles before accommodating myself into my job. Clearly, we can learn from the example that the more competent we have, the better workers we are.
Consistency is to pre-undergraduates as the market is to high-quality economic development. We cannot fail to inhibit the motivation to find a job or travel all over the world before having a higher school life. Just as Shakespeare has put it, "Strong reasons lead to strong actions."
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 45, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... appears as the first factor is that we cant afford to adjust ourselves to the role ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, e.g., first, if, may, really, regarding, so, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97037037037 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11555238548 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60987654321 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5099987345 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.65 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170132514931 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426063558924 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400983441232 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902388593373 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341132847367 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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