Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
What is beyond dispute is that the endless debate regarding whether recording our daily life on the Internet, in modern society, has never failed to cause broad public concern and simultaneously provoke a hot topic among private individuals. Some are inclined to be strong advocates in the extreme claim that writing or photographing such things is unnecessary because of the potential danger. In theory, perhaps sound and attractive as their perspective seems, but in practice, it can by no means bear closer analysis. Consequently, I, without hesitation, hold the view that I prefer to post everyday fun to social-networking sites on account of the following evident grounds and examples.
What appears as the first factor is that it can improve our ability to look at things in a positive light. To be more specific, due to the existence of your audiences, you have to prepare your fodders to be colorful enough to deserve to be recorded. This point can be better and further supported by the example from one of my intimate classmates, Lihao. He always complained about the daily life that he had to face and felt gloomy until he tried to upload his vlog to WeChat because of my suggestion. By doing this, he generally becomes optimistic- falling in love with every day. Apparently, this idea may inform us that keeping records on social-networking sites truly benefits a healthy mind.
Most importantly, your co-workers or new friends can comprehensively understand you. Precisely, it is believed that in our fast-paced world, it's unlikely for them to spend a great deal of time getting to observe you. Therefore, gorgeous records play a crucial role in this situation. I can think of no better illustration for this viewpoint than the instance from myself when I was a senior student. It is the records on WeChat that brought me my first courtship. If my girlfriend hadn't posted her musical performance video, I wouldn't have known that she excels in singing and wouldn't have had a crush on her. Clearly, we can learn from the example that it is a way for others to learn more about you.
Sharing your life on social-networking sites is to private individuals as the market is to high-quality economic development. Accordingly, we cannot fail to note exciting things such as Having a party, Making a speech in public, etc. Just as Shakespeare has put it, "Strong reasons lead to strong actions."
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, apparently, but, consequently, first, if, look, may, regarding, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97524752475 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02848127831 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611386138614 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1327796197 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155531517626 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414708489342 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416194787391 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842729965697 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145577827671 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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