There are different opinions on whether or not people should create social-networking sites and make an archive of their experiences and memories by uploading pictures and videos of them. Even though some people think that the whole concept of creating a social media account and uploading pictures and videos is waste of time and people can devote their time to more productive tasks, I believe otherwise, maintaining that the twenty-first century has been a sharp increase in technology and internet access, so people should exploit at least some of the advantages that technology has provided for them. What is better than using this privilege to share our experiences with others and making our memories preserve? In what follows, I will delve into the most persuasive reasons to substantiate my perspective.
Without a doubt, the most consequential reason corroborating my stance on this subject is that by creating a record of their experiences and memories, people can have access to them any time they want. Indeed, they can still use the traditional form of storing their pictures or videos, for example, keeping them in a box, but the pictures kept in this way are more subject to be destroyed or deteriorated. People can preserve and maintain their memories and experiences eternally by uploading a picture or a video of them to their social media accounts. Therefore, this reason manifests that the best way to perpetuate an experience or a good, or even a bad, memory is to upload a picture or a video of it on social media.
Although the previous reason is the first one crossing the mind at first glance, another remarkable point deserving some words here is that nowadays, people pick their friends not only based on their personality but also their interests. Having mutual interests results in long-lasting friendships. People usually, in the first stages of their friendships, take a look at each others' social media accounts since it is the best way to become aware of one's interests. Take me as an example, I have so many friends some of whom have been my friends for over four years. This is possible because I have been always in the habit of taking look at people's social media to see if we have mutual interests or not. If I did not have this habit, I would not have been able to cultivate perpetual relationships with my friends. This point, thus, illustrates the necessity of having an active social media full of pictures and videos.
All in all, many people are in favor of the notion that uploading pictures and videos on social media or social networking sites are nothing but the dissipation of time. Nevertheless, the foregoing points lead us to conclude that not only is uploading images and videos the best way to preserve their memories, but it also aids people to find the right person to become friends with.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
There are different opinions on whether or not people should create social-networking ...
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Line 1, column 545, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...cess, so people should exploit at least some of the advantages that technology has provided...
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Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e it is the best way to become aware of ones interests. Take me as an example, I hav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, at least, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90082644628 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74635821351 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473140495868 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.6561875999 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.529411765 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4705882353 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263459053016 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093918346474 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650451671116 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179125904082 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520849315365 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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