There are different opinions on whether or not people should create a social-networing sites and make an archive of their experiences and memories by uploading pcitures and videos of them. Even though some people think that the whole concept of creating a social-media account and uploading pictures and videos is waste of time and people can devote their time to more productive tasks, I believe otherwise, maintaining that twenty-first century has been a sharp increase in technology and internet access, so people should exploit at least some of the advantages that technology has provieded for them. What is better than using this privilege to share our experiences with others and making our memories preserve? In what follows, I will delve into the most persuasive reasons to substantiate my perspective.
Without a doubt the most consequential reaosn corroborating my stance on this subject is that by creating a record of their experiences and merories, people can have access to them any time they want. It is true that they can still use traditional form of storing their pictures or videos, for example keep them in a box, but the pictures kept in this way are more subject to be destroyed or ruined. People can preserve and maintain their memories and experiences eternally by uploading a picture or a video of them in their social media accounts. Therefore, this reasons manifests that the best way to perpetuate an experience or a good, or even a bad, memory is to upload a picture or a video of it in social media.
Although the previous reason is the first one crossing the mind at first galance, another reamrkable point deserving some words here is that nowadays, people pick their friends not only based on their perosonality but also their interests. Having a mutual intrests results in long-lasting friendship. People usually, in the first stages of their friendships, take a look at each others' social media accounts since it is the best way to become aware of one's intrests. Take me as an example, I have so many friends some of whom have been my friends over four years. This is possible because I have been always in the habit of taking look at people social media to see if we have mutual intrests or not. If I did not have this habit, I would not have been able to cultivate perpetual relationships with my firends. This point, thus, illustrates the necessity of having an active social media full of pictures and videos.
All in all, many people are in favor of the notion that uploading pictures and videos in social media or social-networking sites is nothing but the dissipation of time. Nevertheless, the foregoing points lead us to conlcude that not only is uploading images and videos the best way to preserve their memories, but it also aids people to find the right person to become friend with.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
There are different opinions on whether or not people should create a social-networing...
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Suggestion: some
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Suggestion:
...asons to substantiate my perspective. Without a doubt the most consequential r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, at least, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2357.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86983471074 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78253782253 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485537190083 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.2470137175 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.647058824 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4705882353 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263060461541 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906178135911 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585203915084 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17530108058 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469538940149 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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