In the letter to the editor of the national newspaper, the author concludes that the editor claims that the majority of competent workers who have their jobs due to corporate downsizing in Elthyria, face economic hardship before finding a new job is undermined by a recent report on the Elthyria economy. According to this report, during recent years, more jobs have been created than eliminated, resulting in the lowest possible unemployment rate. Moreover, more than two-thirds of these jobs are full-time and are in industries that tend to pay above-average wages. Nonetheless, while the conclusion drawn by the writer might hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus, the author must provide the following three pieces of evidence.
First of all, the author assumes that all the workers are able to find a job as soon as they have been expelled or have resigned from their previous job. It is probable that despite the high job opportunities that have been created in recent years, those who have been expelled are not able to find a new jobs. The low rate of unemployment might stem from the noticeable gap between the employed group and fired employees or workers' group, but still, those who have lost their jobs are not among the former group while they are a member of the latter group. Accordingly, the higher wages in newly created jobs have no impact on improving the economic status of these workers. If this scenario has merit, the author's assertions that the workers can find a job immediately after leaving their previous job and the low rate of unemployment casts doubt on the editor's claim that unemployed workers face difficulties before finding a new job are significantly hampered.
Secondly, the corporations that have fired some of their workers and job opportunities that have been created in recent years might work in a completely different world. For instance, a dairy factory downsized half of its workers, but there have been created thousands of job positions for programmers during the last few years. A technician or a worker who majors in working with devices has no experience in programming. So he or she has to wait for some years to find a suitable job position that is consistent with his or her abilities. Thus, the author must provide evidence regarding the field of operation of corporations that have reduced the number of their workers and the area in which the newly created jobs are operating or need employees and workers. The argument does not hold water if the above is true.
Finally, the author did not provide any evidence about the authenticity of the report based on which he or she claims that many jobs have been created and the unemployment rate has been reduced. It is possible that this report is fabricated or presents misinformation for one reason or another. If the author cannot approve the authenticity of the report, the credibility of the author's claim decreases substantially.
To recapitulate, it is possible that the report based on which the author reaches his or her conclusion is concrete, and unemployed workers do not confront any economic hardship after leaving their last job until finding a new job. Nevertheless, as it stands now, the argument relies on three groundless assumptions. Therefore, the writer must provide additional evidence, three of which are mentioned above.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 571 350
No. of Characters: 2829 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.888 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.954 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.764 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.955 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.558 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'job'?
Suggestion: job
...een expelled are not able to find a new jobs. The low rate of unemployment might ste...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, finally, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thus, while, as to, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2893.0 2260.96107784 128% => OK
No of words: 571.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06654991243 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83743809248 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439579684764 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.9 705.55239521 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8428543957 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9545454545 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.40909090909 5.70786347227 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268591091726 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776994325488 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978271322988 0.0701772020484 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152114855389 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101616908165 0.0628817314937 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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