Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young people are the cornerstones of society, whose decisions determine the prosperity and retardance of the community. In this line of thought, some people believe that juveniles should decide to take at least one year off after high school and then continue their educational journey, while others hold the opposite view, thinking that education has to get followed uninterruptedly. After taking various factors into consideration, I, personally, concur with the latter group for 2 main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
The first and foremost reason is that if youngsters keep on their education without a year off, they can stay more focused, which in turn brings prosperous lives for them. To be more specific, the most effective way that urges students to take education seriously is by placing them in educational environments, such as the university. In this way, they can closely observe the efforts of their peers to get successful in their path and become motivated to concentrate on their lessons and future career. If they take one year off, travel for a while, or hang out with their friends, they may give up going to the university. In this way, all of their previous efforts would be useless.
Secondly, attending the university makes people gain more skills, which necessarily must be done as quickly as possible in today's competitive world. Indeed, advances in science and technology elevated the pace of life, which consequently generated a plethora of competition over every single issue in life, one of which is finding a job. In this path, job seekers should become qualified so early that they can win the competition with their counterparts. Accordingly, beginning their studies at the university without taking any breaks helps them accomplish their goals. I take myself as an example to clarify this matter. After I finished high school, I dedicated all my time to studying for Konkur--the university entrance exam in Iran--, while one of my classmates, Sara, decided to be away from university for one year. The next year I entered Tehran University and got graduated 4 years afterward. I remember, after my graduation in a job interview for a large pharmaceutical company I defeated Sara, my old classmate and one of the applicants because I finished the university 1 year sooner and I had created all the required skills for that job. I presume that if Sara did not take one year off she could take the job.
To sum up, attending the university without one-year break is essential. This is because not only it prevents students from being distracted, leading to success, but also it provides opportunities to build their required skills and earn competitive advantages over their counterparts.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, at least, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10619469027 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9072917852 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557522123894 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8693710532 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.473684211 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7894736842 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211606669878 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686451586503 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538002029415 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126174537183 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549608379702 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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