Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Providing Internet access is just as important as other services, such as building roads, so governments should offer Internet access to all of their citizens at no cost.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's chaotic world, advance in technology is vital and determines the prosperity and retardance of a nation. In this regard, one of the modern and determinative pieces of equipment to accomplish scientific achievements and novel technology is the internet, which makes its related decisions increasingly important. In this vein, some people believe that achieving free-cost internet access even in the most isolated and remote regions is as essential as paying attention to other services, such as transportation-contributed projects, while others hold the opposite view and think otherwise. I, personally, concur with the former group for two primary reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First, the free internet turns education more successful in far-off places. To be more specific, nowadays, fulfilled improvements in science provided a plethora of opportunities for students to strengthen their weaknesses or follow their desired fields of study by surfing and searching on the internet. Additionally, educators can exploit the contributed platforms and websites to higher the knowledge of students and the perception of their lessons and also determine efficient methods of teaching juveniles. In this regard, eliminating the expenses of internet service makes it possible for the whole society, including outland villages with poor financial conditions, to utilize the mentioned benefits and make a progress in children's studying. I take my biology high school teacher as an example to clarify this issue. Even though biology is a hard-to-memorize lesson with all those cycles and processes, my teacher turned it into an easy-to-recall course with a website, which contained hundreds of biological animations. Whenever we investigated a new part of a plant, we could click on the wanted segment and watch the film. I learned the Krebs Cycle with this method and used it years later in the university's advanced botany class. This could never have happened if we hadn't possessed access to free internet in our village, Ghasem Abad, 100 kilometers away from the nearest city since the financial state of its people was not good enough to purchase internet service.
Secondly, free internet-based platforms make social communications from the nearest to the most remote locations available, which improves citizens' mental health, reflected in augmented efficiency. To elucidate this, decreasing the price and, more efficiently, eliminating the costs of using something makes it accessible for more people, specifically needy ones. In this line of thought, if the people of deprived villages with bad financial situations have access to the Internet, they can use it to connect with their family and friends in other cities through social media. In this situation, their destructive emotions, including anxiety, depression, homesickness, and so on, goes down and a sense of satisfaction emerges. By decreasing the negative senses and consequent stresses and pressure, mental health picks up. Mental health brings high intellectual ability, which in turn enhances people's yield.
To sum up, free internet access in the entire country is as important as other instrumental projects, stipulating the government to pay attention to it. This is because not only does it turn education in far lands more prosperous by providing various tutorial websites and articles but also it enables communication with people even in the most faraway spots, which increases public euphoria and output.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 321, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lated decisions increasingly important. In this vein, some people believe that ach...
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Line 2, column 715, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...utilize the mentioned benefits and make a progress in childrens studying. I take my biolog...
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Line 2, column 1279, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...s. This could never have happened if we hadnt possessed access to free internet in ou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2985.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54832713755 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12261738747 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 319.0 212.727598566 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592936802974 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 928.8 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2265264141 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.142857143 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.619047619 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22671542322 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060220283214 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509291711519 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138927831116 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147859649728 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.01818996416 127% => OK
difficult_words: 181.0 86.8835125448 208% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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