Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Young people are the cornerstones of society, whose abilities determine its prosperity or retardance. In this line of thought, some people believe that rules adopted for youngsters to pursue are too severe, while others hold the opposite view. Admittedly, even though a handful of rules may seem too absolute, I, personally, concur with the latter group for 2 main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
The first and foremost reason for the aforementioned notion is that set rules were created in a way that makes juveniles' life prosperous. In this vein, respecting the established rules build youth's discipline, which in turn bestows them with further job opportunities in order to attain glory in their career. Youngsters, who do not respect the law, will never be capable of either interacting with society or generating a decent or sustainable life of their own. Besides, rules make youngsters gain more skills, which would come in handy in the future. For example, when a student needs to show up at school at a specific time, he gradually learns to arrange his affairs and make a plan to sleep sooner at night for the sake of getting up early in the morning. If a student learns and practices planning skills during the education period, he never faces troubles in his future career. Additionally, it raises the demand for hiring him for higher job positions.
Secondly, pursuing rules ensures the youth's mental health. To be more specific, rules were held to prevent conflicts in society. If individuals do not implement rules, they probably will have arguments about every single issue in their daily life with other people in the community. These arguments increase the level of tension, stress, and pressure, which leads to detrimental consequences on mental health. On the other hand, juveniles can build a good picture of themselves by acting legally in society, resulting in attracting people's attention. In this way, they can find a network of companions, who are ready to assist in crisis or may find more job positions, both of which raise their sense of satisfaction. If a young person fills his life with positive emotions, he will be able to improve his mental health status.
To sum up, obeying rules not only makes young people live a gainful life but also guarantees their mental health. So, by ignoring a few if any tough rules, most established rules are beneficial for the youth.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00246305419 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71869975367 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588669950739 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.397118727 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.894736842 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147325621044 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441564997823 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345462989939 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0987246926273 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337364977475 0.0645574589148 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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