Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that since the dawn of humanity, each society in the world has had it's own rules and obligations to control its citizens and safety of the community. In this modern era, because of the population growth, each country's government strives to control the citizens by some obligations that sometimes give a strict feeling to a portion of societies, like younger people. Conversely to some people who are inclined to this view that today's rules are not strict for the young population, following and obeying the rules is too tough. I will mention two of my reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the first reasons that is worthy to note is that all humans since they have born like to live freely, but governments have to set some rules like, restriction of music loudness in cities to administer. However, it causes younger people anxiety and anger. To be more specific, all citizens who live in urban and especially the bigger cities have to obey these kinds of rules, like checking their music sound, party time, and even presenting in the streets, because these voices cause disturbing for neighbors, then, wholely push the societies to anarchy. But these rules which are real logical is, somehow restricted for younger population. As an illustration, I can mention my cousin who always love to have a night party with his friend, because he is in his early twenties, but his family do not permit him, and he always is angry and sometimes he does not follow the rule.
The second reason that strikes my mind is that these days, governments have to make some critical rules to control crime and financial problems which most of the time cause young people sadness and is too strict for them like passing governmental courses to get job opportunities. In detail, these kinds of forces that surely help the countries disciplined is to strict for young people, because they think these kinds of rules push them back in this modern era, so they cannot earn money as soon as they graduate from university. For instance, my older brother, who was graduated two years ago should pass the governmental civil courses which is obligatory, however he believes that is so strict and always has some argument with our parents, because he does not like to follow that strict rule.
To wrap it up, today's government expectation of young people for following the rules is too strict, in this regard, as I mentioned in the previous paragraphs, the rules of music and voice control in big cities, or the obligation to pass some courses to give job opportunities is to strict for young people to follow.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Conversely,
...tion of societies, like younger people. Conversely to some people who are inclined to this...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is always
...ut his family do not permit him, and he always is angry and sometimes he does not follow ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, then, for instance, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81333333333 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55756828952 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484444444444 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.3647239477 48.9658058833 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.615384615 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6153846154 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236080388426 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0966586822805 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873297143597 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179273521697 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710638918936 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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