Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.
Our appearance is an important part of our lives. Although this may not be ideal, our clothes often determine what people think about us and how they treat us. Some people believe that the clothes that we wear also influence our behavior, while others disagree. In my view, they do influence our behavior for many reasons.
The first reason is that we choose different clothes for different occasions to tell us how to behave. When you want to be active and fun you wear clothes that matches that behavior, on the other hand, when you want to be serious and formal you wear different clothes. For example, When I got to go to work the other day, I chose to wear formal clothes; it wasn’t an accident. I wanted to wear a suit, a shirt and tie, to match the kind of I was going to do. While working, I would often find that I would be a little more serious than normal because of the way I was dressed. I stood up straighter and talked with more force and confident. Because of the way I look, it made me acting serious, and focued. Moreover, another example that clearly demonstrates how my clothes affects my behavior is that last weekend when I want to go to the gym. I usually wear sport clothes, a T-shirt, a short, and running shoes. This appearance gives me the chance to do physical activities comfortably, and very easily to move around. Also, when I stood in front of mirror and saw myself reflection in the mirror before leaving, my clothes clearly made me feel that it’s time to do exercises, so be active, strong, and sharp. As you can see, the clothes that we wear do strongly impact our behavior.
The second reason is that your clothes influence the way that people treat you and by default, the way that people treat you affects your behavior. If you wear strange clothes, people may stare at you as you ‘re an insane. Regardless of how you feel, you will probably be little bothered by this and behave accordingly. For instance, When I was at a university, I took a class of a clinical therapy, this class was heavily depended on doing research. And thus, my professor divided us into groups of 2 to 3 people. My group consisted of 3 people, including me. One of the team member was a guy who used to wear a black shirts, with weird symbols depicts on them, all the time. Since I had never known him, I thought he was in dark, serious, and depressed person. Whenever we had to work together, we would always work independently and finish quickly as possible as can. I didn’t try to make conversation with him and so he became very aggressive with me. One day, we had to do a seminar together that specialized with certain disease. It lasted for several days; so, we had to work together. After a while, I started talking to him. Surprisingly, I realized I was wrong about him and became pretty close. Then, we have become friends since that time. Every time when I talked about this story, I think that if I had been open to him, he would have felt more comfortable talking to me sooner. This experience taught me that the way you dress really does influence how people treat you, which affects how you behave with them.
In short, whether your clothing’s influence is intentional because you chose it for a specific occasion or its influence is unintentional because you react to how someone else treats you, what we wear has a string influence on how you behave. That’s why we should all choose what we wear very carefully.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, if, look, may, moreover, really, second, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, in short, kind of, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 121.0 43.0788530466 281% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2853.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 628.0 407.700716846 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54299363057 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00598923014 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55283086271 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468152866242 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 872.1 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 29.0 9.59856630824 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 6.0 0.994623655914 603% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 14.0 3.51792114695 398% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.0258180283 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5142857143 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9428571429 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.97142857143 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325596807272 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735711195873 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780055146427 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190609044363 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509761717097 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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