Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People learn things better from those at their own level- such as fellow student or co-workers - than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The knowledge of all human beings is not complete and they have to seek advice from others. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among people about who is the best person to help them understanding a subject or solving a problem. Some people believe that since individuals at higher level are more experienced than those at the lower level, they are able to transfer their knowledge much better. Others, however, advocate the idea that learning from people who have the same position with them could be more effective. I personally, concur with the latter. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
To begin with, people can communicate with their peer easier because they are imitate with each other. When a student ask his/her friend to learn him/her a concept, he/she can ask his/her question easily as opposed to the situation when a teacher teaches a student because the young person maybe become embarrassed to ask all the question he/she has. In addition, people at the same level could obtain deep understanding by discussing the problem to their friends. For example, I can recall when I was a shy teenager and I solved my mathematics problems with my friend whose name was Maral. I could ask question everywhere I did not understand and she explain to me completely. Not only did she help me a lot, but she also understood the concept down to the small details by explaining the problems to me which raised his grade outstandingly.
Secondly, people at the high level such as teachers or supervisors have a hectic schedule, so they cannot share a lot of time with students or their employees. As opposed to a fellow student who has enthusiasms to help his/her friend. They can think with each other for hours to solve the problems without any limitation.
To sum up, I really believe that students can learn a lot from their peers rather than their teachers on the ground that they have close relationship with each other and their peers have a lot of time to help them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to understand' or 'understand'.
Suggestion: to understand; understand
...out who is the best person to help them understanding a subject or solving a problem. Some pe...
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Line 3, column 79, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'imitated'.
Suggestion: imitated
...with their peer easier because they are imitate with each other. When a student ask his...
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Line 3, column 653, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'explains'.
Suggestion: explains
...everywhere I did not understand and she explain to me completely. Not only did she help...
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Line 3, column 844, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e which raised his grade outstandingly. Secondly, people at the high level such ...
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Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... time with students or their employees. As opposed to a fellow student who has ent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in addition, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80911680912 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63940087155 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535612535613 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4026201955 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.5 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9375 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241426845456 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784867564022 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802548908302 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159269267628 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512513110956 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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