Nowadays, society is evolving into a place in which everybody seeks personal enjoyment in their life, and they sometimes forget what they should do. This is actually something inevitable because of several reasons.
First of all, social media dominates society. In fact, each person feels the urge to check their instagram fee every 5 minutes. This behavior is inevitable because these platforms are where people get news about regular life, and for example, if you don’t know gossip about some movie artist, then others would judge you. Therefore, people do care about checking social media. On the other hand, some are too used to this, they cannot stop themselves, although they are aware of what they should do instead. In both ways, people spend lots of time on their phones and lose connection with the real world. There is also a reality versus instagram life going on. Instagram posts do not always reflect the truth of the person’s real life, since instagram life is more fun for them. Consequently, either intentionally or unintentionally people seek personal enjoyment in social media.
Another reason people would find work related responsibilities boring if they do not like what they do for work. There are lots of people who unwillingly work in jobs that they are comfortable with. Yet, to live in society, everybody needs to earn money, so that they would have nice life standards. Sometimes, either because of their past mistakes or because they couldn’t have the right opportunities before, they would end up with works that they don’t find interesting. In these situations, they would look for personal enjoyment, in a sense they avoid their responsibilities and want to fill this gap in their lives. For example, when I was in university, I needed to work to save some money, and I started to work as a waiter. However, I was studying biology back then, and I found this job not convincing for me. Pleasing the customers is not in my best interest, and I end up ignoring some orders, and look for any spare time that my boss wouldn’t see me and watch some episode of a series, so that I can enjoy the time I spent there. Yet, I wouldn’t spend lots of time on personal enjoyment, but do my job instead. However, in any case, in my humble opinion, people seek for this personal enjoyment, if they are pleased with their current job.
Overall, these are two reasons why people spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than things they should do.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, for example, in fact, first of all, in any case, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86823529412 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59885521777 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524705882353 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6930763584 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0454545455 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3181818182 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344256491658 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109904673417 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123653271578 0.0737576698707 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283143406158 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128602815803 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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