do you agree or disagree with the following statement? social media affected our life and ruined our relationships
These days Social media and smart phones engaged with our daily routine life and our professional life more than ever. It has effects in almost every aspect of human life. In my point of view smart phones and online social media networks have destroyed relationship and communication between friends and family members.
The first reason to support my idea is that online social medias have reduce face to face communications. For instance family members have started to talk to each other by texting instead of talking face to face even if they’re at home at the same time. In addition this cause lack of physical activities a lot. They prefer to sit in their own room for hours, spending time on scrolling in social networks instead of going around the house and hang out with their family.
The second reason I want to mention is that being engage with social networks increase chance of addiction to these sort of activities such as posting frequently in social networks, seeing others posts. each time they spend more hours of their day on online social networks . Also it may cause depression since it may make people hallucinate that others have perfect life style, always having fun and no problem ever, and they might came into conclusion that it’s just them who are having a messed up life full of family problems to deal with.in addition this may create expectations from other family members especially from parents to provide more staff for living more comfortable but in reality parents couldn’t effort many of these kind of expectations so it cause conflicts between parents and children and ruin their relationship.
So based on the above reasons that I mentioned I believe that social networks and smartphones destroyed relationship between family and friends although it has own benefits such as provide better and more long distance communications.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, for instance, in addition, kind of, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07395498392 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62372977313 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572347266881 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 139.201797747 48.9658058833 284% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.454545455 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2727272727 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177650298515 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740890177922 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797477959733 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118958501854 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915797913266 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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