Some people believe that, the advancement of technology made children less creative than before, but I disagree. In my opinion, the technology has preparing lots of modern facility to improve the life quality of humanity. This welfare and tranquility also includes children and it makes it possible to create robots with the help of the Internet, children even at an early age.
First, nowadays, in an era of progress, children grow up in enormous activities and most of the parents are busy so they are good at using tablets and cell phones to not get bored or searching about their research topics, therefore some of them interested in robotic major to learn academic and maybe they invented something new to change human’s life. For example, my daughter is 6-year-old and last year she was interested to online games and one day she came to my room and ask me could she has a robotic dog? And I told her yes you can have it if you paint it in paper. I said this, to somehow just answered her question, but she made it serious. After 3 weeks, she showed me a painting of robotic dog, and I just shocked to how my little kid is creative., so I called one of my friends to talk about the academic classes of robotic for children and he submitted my daughter name to class and now she has her robotic dog, his name is Robin, Robin always clean our home and teach France to Rosa. We can be planning him or update it.
Second, beside of these advantages, technology has some disadvantages sides too, children specially students should have a schedule to how many hours use these facilities. Because some of them addicted to it and they couldn’t pass their school exams. For example, I road in New York newspaper with that topic, ‘’one child died in front of computer’’, it’s so scary to hear about it but that was a true news.
In conclusion, children are creative in all decades but their life just had changed a lot than before. Their parents should take care of children and find their talent to make a happy life for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'true news'.
Suggestion: true news
... so scary to hear about it but that was a true news. In conclusion, children are creativ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r talent to make a happy life for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68032786885 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70710983672 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581967213115 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.5028374556 48.9658058833 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.357142857 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124466900215 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506001911836 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475358185737 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837655144986 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428661027249 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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