Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

Twenty-first century and technology progress make the life so hard for people since they have to play different roles in their societies. Moreover, people life in the past was so simple and bearable due to the lack of jobs' diversity. Reversely, nowadays life is so complex, and people are under a huge mass of tension. So, human being have to adopt technology since it can be just like as a knife for cutting the cheese. Although many people think that technology just brings sad for nowadays' people since the result of technology is just damaging the environment, I totally disagree with them due to some benefits that technology gifted to humanity. It is kind of interesting to find out the reasons in details further in my essay.

The first reason that deserves to be pointed out is that technology brings hygienic progress for humankind. More precisely, technology progress leads people to be survived forever. In other words, nowadays people owe their healthy condition to medicine drugs and stuffs. Without them continuing the life would be incredible for us. For example, during the eighteen century, more than hundred millions of children died in Asia because of the lack of medicine drug. What would happen if this mortality rate continued? None of us were survived since there were not any ancestors to breed child. On the other hand, after medical innovation and producing diagnostics stuffs, doctors could cure people and help them to experience the sweet taste of life. In short, the more technology progress,the more comfortable and friendly life.

Aside from the point I made above, the second point is that technology make the life easy for people by doing their daily tasks. Actually, technology is just like as a slave for human being. the most touchable instance is computer invention. Everyone knows that nowadays people are living with their own laptops or home computers. Students use computer to connect to Internet to gather some pieces of great information in terms of their educational topic, be in communication with their classmates and professors, using social media, and so on. Moreover, bank employees use their computers to do accounting and without computers, they never can manage people's financial accounts. To sum up, technology paves an smooth way for people by doing their daily activities.

In conclusion, although some of clear-sighted believe that technology ruins people's life because of its bad side effects such as weather pollution, I argue that technology is necessary for people since it could save the human's generation. Moreover, people owe their life to technology devices such as computer since these devices do all of humans' tasks and jobs.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, moreover, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in short, kind of, such as, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14090909091 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68341631889 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540909090909 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.856305199 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.25 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11044125063 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346757711879 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317941926475 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0740699193155 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330644375495 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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