In the past several dacades, the world has gone through massive changes on both an individual and a societal level. New technology repalced the old clumsy tools. Television advertisements, on of the most ground-breaking inventements, have altered humans' life. The debate over whether television advertising toward young children shoudle be banned is still fierce. Some may suggest it is the right of companies. However, I hold this view differently. These advertisements should be controlled.
To begin with, nowadays, due to the lack of life experience, young children may acquire some bad habit from advertisements. Many advertisements are designed to perform delicious and fresh, thereby stimulate people's eatting desire. There are plenty of faster food restaurants, like McDonald's or BurgerKing who serves their consumers with food containing high calories, excessive fats and sugers, spend enormous money on the advertisement field to attract more consumers' attention. In order to expand their profits, they use some vivid television advertisements to attract young children, which influences them gradually. They may hold a incorrected conception that junk food is acceptable and hard to get raid off this influence.
Moreover, most young children aged two five are lack of judgment; they are hard to have clear coginition for advertisements, which means they are more susceptible to a attractive advertisements than adults. Advertisements directed children today tend to use disclaimers, a small explanation of advertisement with tiny text. Advertising companies utilize these disclaimers to avoid being condemend after using some exaggerated words. Nevertheless, a recent study conducted by Harvard University has shown that eighty-five percents of young children that are aged two to five do not be able to recognize thses disclaimers and in turn affect their understanding of the real meaing of the advertisement. Hence, I firmly believe these advertisements should be forbidden.
In a nutshell, it is undoubtedly a wiser choice to protect young children from these advertisements for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69811320755 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33568950784 2.67179642975 125% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632075471698 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 63.9906677224 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05555555556 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289327873009 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832162042274 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701200062478 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166255649296 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071672877871 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.48 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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