Television Advertisements have deep impact on minds of the Humans. Personally I believe television ads specially directed for the young children should not be allowed to aired. I feel this way for several reason which i will elaborate in following
essay.
First of all Young children are not having enough knowledge to judge any product and they easily get trapped to advertisements. This is what companies take advantage of they endorse their brands using the cartoon character and trap the innocents. Young will ask for the product for the product without having idea about harmful effects of that products. My personal experience is compelling example of this. My nephew who around 4 years old and a big fan of cartoon character Mickey Mouse. He use to be rebellious for each and everything where he sees Mickey. One day in advertise he saw a food packet in which they were providing complimentary toy of Mickey mouse and he started again asking for him. Though the product was unhealthy for young then also this campaigns are run on the television to attract the children.
Secondly sometimes few advertises are violent and lasts impression on child which may be not good for the child for the future years. For instance, few years ago their was a advertisement in which a child steals money from his mother's purse and buys toys for him. This spread wrong message in children and ultimately insist them to do them because they obviously learn from nearby environment. Of course this sort of campaigns should be stopped and actions should be taken in way to curb such practices. This can campaign are used by food, toy and many companies which infuse children towards their products. Also it's parents duty keep their young away from such wrong influences which are not good for their development of children. For example a Television advertisement showing bribery or murder would obviously a bad influence and can lead to the worst that can affect a young mind.
On conclusion, I am of the opinion that advertisement campaign directed towards young child should be regulated or completely stopped as soon as possible. This is because it influences the minds of the young at very young age and could lead to a bad practices in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...n of cartoon character Mickey Mouse. He use to be rebellious for each and everythin...
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Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...n of cartoon character Mickey Mouse. He use to be rebellious for each and everythin...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...infuse children towards their products. Also its parents duty keep their young away ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, may, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, i feel, of course, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92388451444 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68816893634 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538057742782 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7398630134 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.8 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199465265035 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683866294992 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485133094992 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151803827267 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450997805865 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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