Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Two people can still become good friends if one of them has more money than the other one does.
Friendships require works. They do not just materialize and maintain themselves and they are not built on a foundation of convenience, either. They take time, patience and two people who are willing to put in the efforts. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed brings us to the moot question as to whether having money could destroy the friendship between friends. However, the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that not only can money help friendships lasting but also can help improve the circle of our friendships. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework.
To commence with, our friends are the inseparable part of our lives owing to the fact that we spend most of our precious time with our friends. Generally phrased, a plethora of people are willing to witness their friends' success and they may help them to reach their goals as soon as possible. Arguably, if a friend gain a substantial amount of budget, there is a possibility that other friends benefit from this achievement. As a palpable example, last year I wanted to run my own business and I was on a tight budget without any money. So, I asked help from one of my close friends who accumulated a hoard of money to help me run a prosperous business. Not only he contributed greatly and borrowed some money but also our friendship becomes stronger because I engaged him in my business. To elucidate more on this issue, if a friend gains a vast sum of money, it could have mutual benefits for friends thanks to the fact that money is not the whole thing in the life.
Another salient point in corroborating my stance is that money could help us distinguish whether our friends are real friends or not. If we take a minute to ponder over it, vast majorities of people continue their friendships in order to gain something beneficial. For instance, a friend of mine used to spend his time in solitude without any friends because no one was interested in spending his time with him. After a while when he achieved a hoard of money, many people changed their ideas and selected him as their best friend. It can be deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that money can provide an opportunity for people to know their real friends and avoid a spurious friendship. However, every coin has two sides. Myriads of people who are wealthy are inclined toward the opinion that when they have money and fortune, they should leave their old friends because they have no money to spend. In this case, money could have deleterious effects on our friendships. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective.
In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion:
... of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, so, while, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.722 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63217856537 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1745121493 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.652173913 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7391304348 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215255083047 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058304740506 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353571214012 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111230311277 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774499886293 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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